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yiling matriarch ([personal profile] marginalia) wrote2003-09-11 09:03 am

and there was d'oz. and there was much rejoicing.

new thing, dominic/oz for [livejournal.com profile] phineasjones's ee cummings challenge (poem at link). so, yes, words and phrases lifted directly from cummings. sort of the idea, yes?



before dominic, oz lived outside of himself. lived in others, in music, in his brain, but not in himself. not in his skin. never in the blood and bone that betrayed him with each swelling of the moon.

it was easier to pretend that it wasn't a part of him, better, he thought, to control and subdue the beast and then to live as much as possible as though it did not exist. live a normal life, a life without the wolf. but then came dominic and the wolf screamed through blood and brain and oz had no choice but to answer.

oz took him then, fast, he thought, to purge both desire and memory. he hovered beyond himself, danced outside of the electricity that was dominic. dominic who was always fully at home inside his body, be it still, curled peacefully in a chair, or moving, dancing like a mad thing, pure instinct bubbling up from his bones and guiding the swivel of his hips.

tripping away, oz thought, get away he thought, but then tripped up by dominic's eyes he stumbled and fell and.

now. me, dominic, low grey eyes trapping grey gravel tumbling in his ear.

and it was new, oh yes, this was a new thing when forget dominic said, stop thinking he said and oz did, yeah, he did. shut down the brain, put an end to control and let dominic free him. laying out like an offering, dominic accepting piece by piece, nuzzling at his neck, a gentle bite to the ear, hands running up and down chest and torso, fierce, possessive kisses burning nerves out from the inside.

please oz hisses, so slow, feels dominic's breath at the base of his cock, feels dominic everywhere please feels dominic smiling against his hip please and there! arches with the sudden relief as dominic takes him, skilled wetheat in the laughing mouth and twirling tongue, and he's arching still, dominic's fingers pressing into his smooth skin, holding him, marking him taking him strong and firm and shock when oz comes shaking warm dominic's electricity all through him.

it's new, then, when dominic crawls up and curls around him, humming soft against his neck, oz melting into him and naming his body where they touch until he falls asleep.

and now, even now, it is quite a new thing, on those nights after the moon when dominic lets him when dominic shows the wolf won't break them. first gentle, exploring scars and tattoos and dominic's temporary hieroglyphics scrawled across his hands, sweat spreading ink mapping oz. then, pulsing together, dominic takes oz's hand, slicks it, spreads, ankles hooking, takes fingers one two three twist and

then oz sinks in, slow as dominic's eyes widen and thighs shake around him, heat tight surrounds him, skin slipsliding him on dominic and dominic on him, hands bracing, falling into a rocking rhythm with kisses not quite meeting. yeah, dominic breathes, there, oh! and oz is reaching for him, wrist twisting and the beat goinggoinggoing hot and tongue and sweat and

he's not thinking anymore, he's not. and he doesn't have to because with dominic under him again and again all is right and his body is right and strong

and the thrill is always new.






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[identity profile] iolanthe-rosa.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:50 am (UTC)(link)
That was really beautiful. I wouldn't have thought one could have intertwined all that cummings so effectively, but it really works. I especially like this:

it's new, then, when dominic crawls up and curls around him, humming soft against his neck, oz melting into him and naming his body where they touch until he falls asleep.

I have no idea who Oz is, but he's a lucky man.

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:48 pm (UTC)(link)
*beam* thank you!

oz in a nutshell - very zen werewolf musician played by seth green :)

[identity profile] jansong.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 10:02 am (UTC)(link)
How lovely, jaci. It's a cool challenge. Very nice.

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:48 pm (UTC)(link)
i just can't resist a challenge ;) thank you!

[identity profile] seraphinhunter.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 11:01 am (UTC)(link)
and it was new, oh yes, this was a new thing when forget dominic said, stop thinking he said and oz did, yeah, he did. shut down the brain, put an end to control and let dominic free him. laying out like an offering, dominic accepting piece by piece, nuzzling at his neck, a gentle bite to the ear, hands running up and down chest and torso, fierce, possessive kisses burning nerves out from the inside.

I really adore this paragraph. It´s beautiful. You´ve done an amazing job with this fic.

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:49 pm (UTC)(link)
cummings did half my work by writing the poem in the first place :) thank you!
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[personal profile] starfishchick 2003-09-11 12:47 pm (UTC)(link)
That first line is fantastic.

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:50 pm (UTC)(link)
that's the secret - have a good opener and a smashing finish and people assume the middle was good, too ;)

thanks :)
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[personal profile] starfishchick 2003-09-12 06:41 am (UTC)(link)
but why is the billy gone?

;)

*hugs*

[identity profile] orolin.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 01:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, this is the first time I've ever even thought of Dom/Oz. And it works! I like it! Maybe Dom/Seth would be easier to write, due to one made up character and a rp, but Dom/Oz does work. The first line is great, all of it is great. And Dom and Oz! *squee!* :D One thing though, I think it would read better if you used proper capitals. I mean, I'm not too bothered about it, but I know that it does annoy some people. :) Amazing fic.

~Kirsty

[identity profile] art-geek.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 07:33 pm (UTC)(link)
Using no capitals is a hallmark of e.e. cummings' work, which this fic has been based on. :) Check out the poem linked at the top! :D

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 10:01 pm (UTC)(link)
you beat me to it :) *heart*

(melinda and i had a thread in the writing journal trying to figure out if i should cap or not, and opted for no caps for that exact reason)

[identity profile] orolin.livejournal.com 2003-09-12 10:30 am (UTC)(link)
Ah, okay, did not see that bit :) Thanks anyway! :D

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:53 pm (UTC)(link)
i never would have thought to write seth, because the idea of dom with the werewolf was so intriguing.

i actually went back and forth on the capital issue. as you can see, when i write in general i neglect it, but when i post fic i generally correct it. i had gone through and fixed half of them, before [livejournal.com profile] dorrie6 and i decided it would be more true to cummings to leave it lower case. he only used capitals with form poems, i believe :)

and, i thank you :) *bow*

*pant*

[identity profile] dacro.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 04:47 pm (UTC)(link)
wow!
*leans on desk*

I have to catch my breath! *gasp*

woah! [livejournal.com profile] dorrie6 said that we should come read and adore, so I just have to say...
*adore*
this is amazing.

What else can I say...oh yeah!

I would love to stand under your creative juices, but my mom says we can't play that any more.

Re: *pant*

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:53 pm (UTC)(link)
wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! *is adored*

:)

how bout you come over to my place and play with my creative juices? promise you don't have to tell your mom ;)

Re: *pant*

[identity profile] dacro.livejournal.com 2003-09-12 01:13 am (UTC)(link)
*rowr*
best offer I've had all week!

I'll be over in 7 days!
age those juices for me!
;)

~J~

[identity profile] azrhiaz.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 05:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Beautiful-hot.

I adore cummings, and you did an excellent job capturing the feel of the poem. And Dom/Oz...*implodes*. Now why didn't I think of that pairing?

Eh, well. I'm just glad you did. Absolutely lovely.

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:57 pm (UTC)(link)
the pairing truly is the pretty. [livejournal.com profile] dorrie6 deserves credit for nagging encouraging me to write it. i have more here (http://students.washington.edu/jaci/fic/doz.html), albeit mostly drabbles and pretty tame after this ;)

i'm really glad to hear that it worked well for those who adore cummings. i tend to be an eliot or hopkins gal outside of the classroom, so my cummings background was limited.

thank you!
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[identity profile] phineasjones.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 09:05 pm (UTC)(link)
::dumbfounded pause::

yeah. that's what i was talking about. right there. in fact, it has elements in common with the sirius/remus i'm working on... hmmmm (: ) wow. so hot and so incredibly beautiful. i'm thrilled that you took up this challenge and that this is the result.

::applause::

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-11 10:05 pm (UTC)(link)
*dances around the room* i've been waiting nervous all day ihopeshelikesitihopeshelikesit

so, whee! thank you! and thank you for issuing the challenge in the first place :)
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[identity profile] phineasjones.livejournal.com 2003-09-13 08:20 am (UTC)(link)
i can't believe you were even nervous. soooo yummy!

[identity profile] meatfight.livejournal.com 2003-09-12 12:06 am (UTC)(link)
This is such a fantastic pairing. Oz is my secret TV boyfriend, and Dom is my secret movie boyfriend, so, really, if you're writing this pairing, I firmly believe you can do no wrong. And you didn't; this was amazing and intense. Something about them just... fits. I don't know. But it works.

[identity profile] marginalia.livejournal.com 2003-09-13 11:11 am (UTC)(link)
they are my super sekrit one true pairing ;) i have a little more (though mostly drabbles and tame after this) here (http://students.washington.edu/jaci/fic/doz.html).

thank you! :)